Critiquing Another Author Takes Time & Empathy But is often worth the effort!

Michael wrote back & said he was not offended & explained some of his reasons behind his choices. A critique can help the critiqued, but can also help the writer of the critique & anyone else who reads it.                                                                                                          Sherrie Miranda’s historically based, coming of age, Adventure novel “Secrets & Lies in El Salvador” is about an American girl in war-torn El Salvador:         Her husband made a video for her novel. He wrote the song too:

Michael,                                                                                                                                                               The idea for this story is fascinating, but you have a style of storytelling that may put most agents and publishers off.
I must be honest & say I have never read anything like this. I was very confused about the time and place. First I thought it was the 1800s, then early 1900s, then I saw Pope Francis mentioned and realized it was the present day.                                                                                                          
The language reminded me of Science Fiction which I personally am not a fan of (though my husband loves it).                                                                                                                                            Are you fluent in another language? Because there were things that I have never seen done before in writing. You often leave out “the,” “her,” “to” and “a.” Is this a stylistic choice?           Have you had any study in the “Tell vs. Show” that is so commonly taught in today’s literature/writing courses? “Indescribably excited” would be much better shown than told. For example, you might SHOW them jumping up & down, as well as other physical ways to show how the girls feel.                                                                                                                                              I was confused by the phrase “physically divided age group.” “Peer group” is a much more common phrase used in modern day English.                                                                                            I also found the phrase “following application of own embrace.” Did you simply mean “Hugged”? The simpler the language, the better IF YOU ARE LOOKING FOR A PUBLISHER. The women from the literature discussed were totally unknown to me. But I must be honest: despite my 62 years, I am a totally contemporary woman.                                                                       I seriously suggest finding a critique group. If you can’t find one near you, find one online. As writers, we need feedback from several people. Then we can consider what they say and decide if we will heed any of their advice. Or decide “screw them,” I’m going to continue doing this my way.                                                                                                                                                                    How many drafts have you written? Joyce Carol Oates, the most prolific contemporary American writer, says she writes seven drafts. Something to consider.                                                 I wish I could be of more help to you, but I read and write in a very straightforward and modern style. I don’t think I can do you justice critiquing your work.

P.S. I hope I have not upset you or made you feel defeated. That is not my intention, but I felt
anything other than honesty would be a disservice to you.

Author: Sherrie Miranda

I am an author who writes in order to create more peace and understanding in the world. I am a teacher who has taught students from many countries of the world. I am also a life and writing coach. I love to travel and first traveled to other countries before finally deciding to see some of the U.S., places that foreigners I met have been to, but that I hadn't. I am happily married to a teacher who identifies himself first, as a musician. We hope to someday travel together to places where I read my novel(s) and speak to people about loving life while Angelo plays his piano and entertains the audience too. I also hope to assist seniors and troubled teens to write their life stories in order to heal. Life has much to offer so I always encourage young people to hang in there and know that things WILL get better.

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